Malaysia Flight 370
I have written a story about a character on Flight 370 and what happened on the plane that caused it to crash mysteriously. It follows all of your parameters and I hope you like it. If there are any issues with the story please reach out to me and I will change or fix anything you need.
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chandrasbgsbg
- 2 år siden
man!!!! good story!!!
- 2 år siden
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Konkurrenceafholder - 2 år siden
Congrats, you win.
We'll use your story in our project.
We are going to discuss more possible changes later, but some initial points to you start thinking:
- first of all something important: my comments are suggestions, not orders.
- the start of the story at the airport and then tell about the past immediately after doesn't convince me. I think it's better if you start the narration directly with the 3nd paragraph (doing this may require some changes to the 3nd paragraph)
- try to reduce the use of ""Hépíng Quánbù"". I mean, after named it at the start, you could replace them with ""the organization"", ""the group"", or something better. The reason of this is: this story is going to be narrated out loud. Also, please give me some guide about the pronunciation of this name. Is it chinese?
- changing the start implies too change, in the page 2, the paragraph after Jian ran off of Heng- 2 år siden
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Konkurrenceafholder - 2 år siden
Hello.
Thank you for your entry.
I like the idea.- 2 år siden
